Hey Room 14!!! I'm writing a book and I want your feedback. It doesn't have a title, and it's only the first chapter. It's fantasy, and blends futuristic( laser beam security, airships), mideval( swords and armor) and modern ( guns). It involves seven dragons being controlled by seven pieces of armor. It tells of a girl who steals a piece of armor, becomes a dragon rider, and attempts to overthrow the evil tyrant ruling the land. I want your feedback on what I can do to improve it, titles or addons to the story. https://docs.google.com/document/d/16OJQ3phNxDbcMiBUadMtu8EbecTPJPiSe3OVCB9gReg/edit#
P.S. I have not added fillers, so this is bare bone. The final will be longer.
I will read that and comment on it when I have time.
ReplyDeletewell that's a waste of words
ReplyDeleteI think it was pretty good. Deffinately better than I could do-- or add onto for that matter
ReplyDeleteVery good! You are officially (if you weren't already) a member of the Typos.
ReplyDeleteMike, so far it's very interesting...make sure I get the first signed copy when it publishes!!
ReplyDeleteUncle Dan
I think it was very cliff hangery I can not wait to read the rest.(Which means it was awsome).
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